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Aug 29, 2004 13:59:27 GMT -5
Post by Avalon on Aug 29, 2004 13:59:27 GMT -5
I wrote one, and I don't know whether or not it's good. You be the judge. My day has past, the lights they fade I've grown to crone the spirits bade Me join them now, forevermore To leave the robe to maiden for To carry the burden of priestess-born The oath that I had once forsworn To lead a people, to beat the path That they must follow, for the Goddess hath Carved in the heavens the way to life A life of truth, and love without strife And so I must, begin the search For she who may, hold long the torch But now I rest, the day grows near And when the Mother guides me, I hath no fear. Good? Not? I want some true opinions.
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Aug 29, 2004 23:35:53 GMT -5
Post by Amalcas on Aug 29, 2004 23:35:53 GMT -5
Good. Very, very good. The tone was consistent, and perfect.
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Aug 30, 2004 22:49:13 GMT -5
Post by PhantomsPandora on Aug 30, 2004 22:49:13 GMT -5
Ooo i love the picture you've made, it's very lovely! Good work on this poem!
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Aug 31, 2004 8:51:00 GMT -5
Post by Tara on Aug 31, 2004 8:51:00 GMT -5
Yes, indeed. Very good poem.
how long have you been writing? And does it have a name?
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Aug 31, 2004 16:12:53 GMT -5
Post by Avalon on Aug 31, 2004 16:12:53 GMT -5
This is pretty much my first poem, no name.
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